My Fantastic Vacation

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I have heard much about the beauty of Singapore, one of four remaining true city-states in the world and one of the most famous cities in Asia. It is the smallest nation in Southeast Asia that is made by many wonderful islands. Last summer, I and my friends decided to visit Singapore, the Lion Island.

Singapore, a small island, lies at the southern and of West Malaysia. A long and narrow piece of land joins Singapore with Johore Hahru, the southern-most town of West Malaysia. Singapore is now an independent state.

The city of Singapore is extremely beautiful. It is well known for its centers of business and other activities. There are many places of interest, such as, the Tiger Balm Garden, the Botanical Gardens and Raffles Museum. There are also many important centers of learning such as the University of Singapore, Science Centre, the Nanyang University and the Polytechnic. Being a famous city, hundreds of people come every day from various parts of the world to do business or to enjoy the sights of the city. Singapore therefore has large and beautiful airports and its harbors are full of ships.

There are many night schools where people who cannot go to the day schools for some reason or other can continue their studies. And, the government of Singapore is still doing its best to make further improvements in the city for the benefit of the people. During my stay in Singapore, I went out every day with my friends to see the beautiful and interesting places and things in the city. One day we went to the Tiger Balm Garden where I saw several statues of people, animals and other strange creature beautifully made and kept. The sea near this garden makes it a pleasant place to visit. We spent almost half of the day at this place.

Another day we visited the museum where I saw hundreds of curious things preserved for scholars and others. It was indeed an education to see all those things. There is so much to learn here that every visit by any person is sure to add to his knowledge. I also visited some of the harbors and saw the large ships anchored there. The sight of the ships aroused a desire in me to cross the oceans and go round the world. I was indeed deeply impressed by activities at the harbor. Then every night, I went round the town and visited some of the parks and other places of interest. The numerous lights and the constant stream of traffic kept the city alive. I visited a few of the cinemas as well. In short, I enjoyed every moment of my stay in this famous city of Singapore.

This trip gave us some experiences about Singapore, a neighborhood of my country. I took many pictures everywhere I came. It is helpful for young people like me, who want to travel around the world to study more about the cultural of different countries.

About Myself

In people's life writing about themselves is necessary to reveal their characteristies and starting new things to their future. So I'm trying to recognize at me. I have my own ambitions. There are three valuable characteristics about my personality that you should remember: first,I'm a fast learner,next I'm an enthusiastic and hardworking employee, and finally I'm a highly creative person.

My name is Ochbayar. I was born in 1991. I'm tall and well-Built. My eyes are brown and big. I have long brown curly hair, middle nose and full-lips. I live in UB because I came to learn in university of Information and Communication Technology. There are four of us in our family. My father is Buyandelger aged 44,My mother is Badamtsetseg aged 40, Sister is Ganchimeg aged twenty one. The person I admire most is my mom. She is kind,loving,responsible and hardworking. My mom is my life role so she is playing an important role in my life. Some nights before I go to bed, my mother talks to me about her past all stories which encourage me to try to learn new things and work hard.
My family live in Erdenet. My sister studies in high school .I was born and raised in the beautiful country which is Mongolian, that is located in the Central Asia. I finished High School there and attended ten-year. This is my fifth semester here. Now I feel more confident about myself, because I passed that courses that I have been taking and received good grades and try to do my best to keep doing it.
I'm a very honest and friendly person. In addition I like science, arts and music, especially classical music and I love listening very much. My favourite music is Pop. I can play basketball very well. I enjoy reading interesting books, watching action movies, hanging out with my friends. I like playing piano, playing big tennis and go to the gym. Unfortunately, I don't have much time to hanging out with my friends now, because I sacrifice my free time to learn. But it worth it in order to be proud of myself in the future and achieve my goal. I really like this school and the I have chosen this school among the others. I'm trying to do my best to study hard and to take good grades, because education is very important for me.
My personality is one of my best assests. I'am funny, outgoing and genuinly care about other people. The thing I dislike is having a hard time expressing my emotions, or letting people on what is bothering me because I assume that gives them the power to hurt me. And I don't like anyone to see me crying. I hold back a lot and I don't like that about me. I love to read Novels, one of my best novels is The Kite Runner and Remember me.
I will graduate my school very well and want to be famous and good person in my future life. Maybe I couldn't revail all about me. But It's satisfied for re-gevoring at me.